Misty

Hi there. K, I was reading through this the other day when it was on the home page and it caught my interest. SO. Let me make a shifty attempt ...

I have to hand it to you, this is good. It was a slowly packed punch. It was like a poem. I really love it. :P I'm sorry I'm not ...

I am a very proud muse. It's like I told you yesterday, you start a story with eloquence, build emotion throughout, and then end with such a punch that it ...

Aha! I feel genius. In a lame sort of way, because even as I started reading it, I knew who is was about and what it would be about and ...

'ello, sambo. I know I promised to do this absolutely ages ago...but erm...I forgot. Heh. Chocolate Cheesecake: INGREDIENTS 1 1/2 cups chocolate cookie crumbs 2 tablespoons white sugar 1/4 cup ...

God, I adored it. Not only is this the best thing you've written, but it's the best thing I've ever read on YWS. Of course, you've improved since the last ...

Ok, so there are clearly a few things at play here. 1) an old man likes to watch TV, 2) he is obsessive compulsive, and 3) there is a thunder ...

Sadly, in fact, it was interesting enough to keep reading. It was like a sick horror movie. There are ways to show without telling. The repitition of God this, God ...

Alas, it failed to amuse me, and I didn't much care for the old bard style, anyway. You might try your luck in the lyrics section, in any case. I ...

Wow. I really enjoyed this. It was very powerful, for a short story. I'm really impressed. Wish I could say something helpful here, but I guess just keep doing what ...

Hey there! Writing about things we know is always fun, and you seem to have taken a lot of dance lessons yourself! It's good to write about what makes you ...

Hey~ I second Meep in; if it's really bad, why should you post it? And why should I read it? However, I DID read it, despite your trying to convince ...

Well, if you read through this you'll find that at one point you say 'his father' which is third person, while the rest of it is first person. And you ...

Nnyeg. Not my favorite. "The lights on the vanity shone with a powerful but kind glow, softly reflecting off her face’s smooth features." Light cannot be 'kind' in the same ...

"Jolly pedestrians weren’t seen without a smile." Yes, I'm sure they weren't, but what about the less-than-jolly ones? Don't write in letters in the middle of a sentence: aka "The ...