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Re: Suicide
This was a very moving poem, very- for lack of a better word- blunt. As in, it's very straight to the point. I liked the imagery, for me it was ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: An Empty Schoolhouse
Hiya. The concept of your work was great, I love the way you used different words to fit in together. The only thing was the rhythm wasn't flow-ey and it ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Snowflakes
I liked it! Mainly because it was talking about a winter in England, as opposed to Australia where all we get are a few rain drops and 15 degrees celcius! ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Strewberries with Cream
Heya I really loved this, brilliantly written, and like the previous comments, excellent contrasts. I love the emotion, and the brutal honesty of this poem. I connected with it quite ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: Supernatural Fan Fiction (so far.)
Hey. First of all, I must tell you how excited I was when I saw this was a Supernatural Fanfic! I have seen every episode, and I bought all 5 ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: Fighting Sleep
Great poem! I liked the concept of it, the only thing I thought was really wrong with it, like the above comment, its rhythm. I think if it had a ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: I'm So Sorry
This was great, I really enjoyed reading it. What would be really cool is like a follow up, where the person being apologized to has a say and talks about ...
Dec 20, 2010 -
Re: Let the Fire Die
Great poem. I loved the rythm of it, I think consistent rhyming would have changed the mood. It was very enjoyable. I'm sorry I didn't 'pick' it apart, I'm still ...
Dec 20, 2010 -
Re: Kiss me when I'm sober
Can you spell AMAZING?! Because I cannot fathom how amazing I find it. Maybe I'm over reacting because I'm tired and delirious, but nonetheless, I loved it now, and I'll ...
Dec 20, 2010 -
Re: 50 word story inspired by 'see that shadow (it's not yours)'
Heya This is great, not only because its 'short and sweet' but it leaves so much for the imagination, and even though you can think about what may happen after ...
Dec 20, 2010 -
Re: Through These Eyes
Hey I really like this poem, it really is a recurring theme in todays society. The only thing I can really say is I think it would be really different ...
Dec 20, 2010 -
Re: Warmed Over
Congrats on turning a dream from ANOTHER PERSON into an enthralling, gripping story! I loved it a LOT! Sorry about the capitalization, but thats how I feel about it! I ...
Dec 19, 2010 -
Re: the sparkly vampire and chosen wizard tales
Heya, I really like your Twilight/Harry Potter parody. Many people have commented on your punctuation and grammar, and even though it may not be intentional, I think it adds to ...
Dec 19, 2010 -
Re: -Age of Mentality- (Literary Journal Entry)
This was so touching- I'm in tears now after reading it and I don't usually cry from reading. I'm going to have to read more of your work! It was ...
Dec 19, 2010 -
Re: Lilly Evans' diary 6
Hey, I really like your idea of Lily Evan's diary. The only thing i have to say is some spelling and grammar mistakes, but other than that keep writing because ...
Dec 18, 2010
