MissGangamash

Hello! Happy Review Day! I really enjoyed this piece, I'm intrigued about the banshees. The myth is that they are female spirits whose cries signal that someone is about to ...

From this chapter I am now gathering that this is in the young adult genre, I was unsure of where you were gong with this piece from the first chapter. ...

Hello! I noticed Chapter 2 in the Green Room so I thought I'd check out Chapter 1 first so I know what's going on. Now onto the review: First of ...

I love the idea of a Jack and Elsa. I'd never come across it before. The story is very whimsical and...kind of biblical? I'm intrigued to know why Jack is ...

This was an okay piece. I felt like it was the start of something though, rather than the whole thing. The way you touched on her mother having cancer seemed ...

I liked the first paragraph but then as it continued, there just seemed to be too many questions. Nothing was really concrete. At least give the reader something. All I ...

This seemed like part of a novel. And when I say part, I mean like a few chapters in. It's well written but I felt nothing for the piece as ...

Your writing flows very well. I'm not great and punctuation myself but to me, nothing struck me as wrong. 'In a moment of footsteps, another face was peering down at ...

This is a very lovely piece that flows really well. The imagery of the wings is beautiful and the way that she explained that the bully's wings showed their sad ...

Another great chapter :) I was a little confused at the beginning because you used the term 'mom'. It didn't really fit right because it is in the third person ...

(just wrote this under the last comment as a reply like an idiot!) Happy review day! This chapter had so much! I loved the part when the SWAT and FBI ...

The structure of this was done well and it felt well rounded, with a beginning, a middle and an end. Onto the subject matter...not going to lie, it got me ...

I haven't read the first chapter but I saw 2.2 in the Green Room so I thought I'd check out the first half. I really love the way you describe ...

Oh no! Great cliff-hanger! Are we now going to know what he wants with these girls? I like how now he's gone after another girl because now I know that ...

I've written a few query letters myself and sent them off to publishers and agents so I'll try and help you out as best I can. First, I'd but this ...