MissGangamash

Hello, here to review! 'But one day,Calypso noticed a young,blond girl in black,who was alone in her room,looking out the window.' - this sentence is quite clunky. Maybe 'One day, ...

Hello! Here to review! This is very wordy for a very simple scene and a lot of it is redundant. 'Nurse Mira breathed after her run to find the Queen.' ...

Hello! Here to review. The narrative style is very conversational, which makes me wonder who exactly the narrator is as it reads like someone telling a story. Is this on ...

Hello! Here to review and kick this out of the Green Room! 'The birdhouse on the tree out back was hand-painted and had been home to many over the years, ...

Hello! Here to review! I'm trying to think of the story behind this. 'You have not been quite the same' yet Jack has ran away. I see that as Jack's ...

Hello! Wadding - Wading fishing for hopes - fishing for hope walks the tight ropes - walks the tight rope Now that's done! I agree with the analysis of vampricone6783, ...

Hello! I really enjoyed this. I liked the repetition used, it made me think of how different moments are between living in them and looking back on them. From what ...

Hello! Here to review! I'm not great with reviewing poetry but I'll give it a go! I liked the story, this idea that 'men need to be strong' doesn't help ...

Hello! Here to help you get this out of the Green Room. 'That was from yesterday night with my friend,' - so, last night? Yesterday night sounds clunky. 'before I ...

Hello! Here for a quick review of a quick piece. Is going to be part of a series? I'm not sure writing through journal entries is the right way to ...

Hello! Here to review! I quite enjoyed this! There were a few sentences that I thought were really beautiful. -'It had been twenty minutes since Eric’s heart had stopped beating ...

Hello! Here for a review. Okay, I was wondering where this story was going and then once I got to the end... it's not what I was expecting but I ...

Hello! Here to review! I really like the whole idea of the snakes surrounding town, it's something different I haven't seen before. It would be good to have more description ...

Hello! I don't really know how to review this because it's not really styled as a literally piece and rather just a thought. But I will give it a go! ...

Hello! Here to kick this out of the Green Room! 'Once upon a time,there was a man named Noah,who was dating a woman named Moira.They were not "normal" people,however.Noah was ...