MiriamHannah

Can I just say, wow, it's so emotionally charged that it's taking me a while to get logical thinking back. Like a lot of the rest I can not find ...

Hi, I couldn't find one mistake, not that I was looking properly I was so caught up in the story, it's amazing. Sorry I can't give more than that but ...

I'm feeling generous, how about a long review. Just as Jay was about to settle down with a nice, cold beer he heard the old brass knocker thump the door. ...

First on it this is where I can do my best reviews. My first point, I believe however odd for you this should be in romantic fiction, I don't know ...

OK, the first line of chapter one is still bothering me, you suggested that she was in a coma for a long time, two days? Anyway, possibly you have a ...

I think everyone's pretty much got all of the mistakes. The only problem I could find is that I got really confused after the first line (didn't take me long, ...

Hi, I liked the originality in the writing style, msn who'd have thought it. The whole instant messaging thing is cool but I wouldn't want to read a whole book ...

Hi Iz, This, in my opinion is even better than racing wind. I think it contains that extra little bit that longer pieces often loose. One nit pick 'hyper aware' ...

Hey Kat, Good to see you on here! cobbled street from the alleyway, it was like old times. It was like old time, just seems slightly out of place, rephrasing ...

Ok. My turn for a review! To start off the reason it seems like a poem is the layout. It is hard to tell what it is really, poem, story, ...

The blue eyes blonde stared sullenly out the car window, glaring at his reflection—or rather the likeness of his brother he saw looking back at him. It's a nice starting ...

Hi, this is such a great story (I think I'm addicted to reading it) I would say use words instead of numbers the whole '1-4' and '5-8' would sound much ...

Only getting better, I would warn that if you're going to describe as much the whole story is going to be huuuuge. Please keep writing and send me the next ...

a name is your identification. would probably put identity/personality/part of you here instead. So why chop your identity in half? I think I get what you mean but at the ...

Hi I found this really funny, my only thing is that after the pencil i immediately assumed he was going to bite her, i was disappointed that he didn't. However ...