MiriamHannah

This is good. I'm not sure how you can describe the wooden paneling as clecha, but that might just be me. Seriously thats such a small nit pick because i ...

Hi, I write like this piece because of its sense of reality. The fact that you are looking over and reviewing your life shows a good quality both in the ...

So I'm assuming your religious. To be honest that's all I get from this, your love of the bible. What you were saying about reading deeper, the deeper you read ...

I like this. Yes, you do need to add punctuation, no one on this site will like you if you don't. About the subject, i don't normally like love stuff ...

Amazing. I can't really speak. It's emotionally charged and beautifully told. For once I can't actually say something you need to improve on, because there isn't anything. I'm so sorry ...

I'm not sure, your first two stanzas are so intense. They contain so much imagery, but at the same time I'm not really sure what that imagery is. I know ...

It's a hard issue to write about, you need credit there. It must be hard to write about so showing it to the web is aspirational. Despite that, I really ...

OK, that wasn't expected.I like this story. I couldn't find many grammatical errors however I would say that the story is going very fast. isn't this the sort of thing ...

Nice, I can't get over your last line. It is good, very good. You said it was short, its really the size of my normal chapters. OK, review, right. I'm ...

I really like this, the idea of a tree as life has been kind of worn out, another simile might be better, but apart from that it is good. The ...

"You he's girlfriend, right?" his instead of he's. "Yes!" I said, I wouldn't put an exclamation point there, the reader already knows it's a big thing and it makes it ...

I think the person before me got everything. That means I get the fun bit to comment on, the story line. Very slow start, you needed to put a bit ...

Really good. A few things that didn't make sense so I'd advise reading through it and those that you can't find by simply proof reading I might as well tell ...

A few things you need to check over, little mistakes with italics and repeating words but apart from that it was flawless. I love where it's going, the choices, the ...

getting a swelled head like most loving sisters would Comma after head I say the hurt flicker in Dylan’s eyes saw instead of say i assume??? The loss of Dad ...