Mikko

I really like this. Your grammar is good though I think some of your uses of semi-commas don't seem quite right to me. Anyway, they don't stop your poem from ...

I love the tone of this poem: it's really cold and...cold. (Excuse me for my lack of words right now.) I like the rhyming scheme and the two couplets. A ...

Well, I liked what you tried to do with this poem. The slang makes it original though we should show that you did it on purpose by putting apostrophes like ...

I like this. Though I also disagree with the point because since it hurts so much, at one point you won't even feel the pain anymore so in that case ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! First of all, to avoid the warning thing you could just rate this. I think 16 or 18+ would be fine because theres sex and bad ...

This is truly beautiful, though you're right: it is a little corny and there are some clichés but it's still very sweet. You need only to touch up on some ...

Yes, I can definately relate! My favorite line is: And leave me with a forced rhyme because it's so true that when writer's block hits you, this is the typical ...

This is a lovely little poem. My favorite line is: For I once loved you, Dani D It was a really nice way to end it. I also like the ...

Wow! I can see you really hate this girl. And yeah, expressing it is the best way to get rid of the feeling but wooow! Ok, one thing I really ...

This is a really nice poem, though I haven't got one idea but many going through my head. It's so paradoxial (I love that!!), thus I must say that you ...

I like this, especially the first two stanzas. The last one seems...off. Simply. I, personally, don't have any problem with "ain't". It's original (if I can say that), it brings ...

Do you seriously hate your dad? Because I'm really feeling your emotions through this poem. I love your poetry: you always make me feel it...it's like magic. Ok, that's weird ...

Mwahaha! You want me to be harsh? Pff, I have nothing harsh to say only that you should try seperating your poem in stanzas. But I think it adds effects ...

Let me take an unimaginative guess: it's about this person who is different compared to those around her. Probably about a person with low self-esteem because of her surrounding society. ...

This is a great piece! The way I picture Death is like Hades in Hercules (the Disney version...) how he talks so fast with an unintentional touch of humour. I ...