Published June 27, 2011
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This is a lovely little poem. My favorite line is:
It was a really nice way to end it. I also like the repetition in this poem. People don't often get it when poets use repetition in their poems but I find it brings something different because it emphasizes on the message you're trying to bring across.Keep writing
This was quite lovely. Even if it was framed after a children's rhyme, it was still really good. Nicely done =]
This was a really good poem. It showed some reall emotion and it came from your heart, which is the best and only way to write a good poem. It's kind of Dr.Suess like, which I enjoyed, especially because it is so different from Dr.Suess.
However this part:
I wish you would have stuck to the rhyming, because when it didn't rhym I was just like errrr, and it kind of took away from the flow. At least that's my opinion.
Overall, great job; I really like this.
I agree. Venting is very good, and very healthy. It's toxic to keep things locked up. And I believe poetry is an excellent way to sum up - or even maybe just hint - at the true feelings inside. And I always say that poetry is very personal and there is no 'right' or 'wrong' way to construct a good poem.
This is really good
Good vent. Poetry is an amazing thing when it comes to venting. This is great 
Pure emotions.