Messenger

go read the first two chapters :)

okay, so I thought some things would be more clear without having to spell them out AKA missing father/hate of soldiers. The whole Carris-looks-Sadorians isn't supposed to be a hint ...

okay great!!! as I said, since it's first-person it's definitely not a huge deal

It's ok to post, even if you're unsure! That's what reviews are for %uD83D%uDE01

oof so much to think about! Thanks for all the comments. :D I will DEFINITELY look into all of that, especially the dialogue.

Yeah, I feel like it's starting to drag a bit. I think once they get out of the cave system things will pick up and we'll really get moving with ...

Yeah, I feel like it's starting to drag a bit. I think once they get out of the cave system things will pick up and we'll really get moving with ...

looking for an lms novel that's still going, eh? I have what you seek

Haha glad you liked it so much. It was definitely one my favorite to write and reread so far %uD83D%uDE01 I will fix that typo and check on Eridan's dialogue ...

haha glad to help. I know it can get busy :D okay as in pronouns opposed to she her hers? That makes more sense. I was low-key like "there's no ...

haha I actually thought you would like this fight scene because it moves the plot forward as they say, but I agree with what you say about Devlin's character being ...

hey again/ Gwyn is just a little bit younger than carris like 14 to 16 respectively. But she has a very motherly take care of others attitude. I'll look into ...

thanks for the review. I just decided to rate every chapter that rating, since some chapters/will contain a lot of violence.

okay, i can see that. I'll keep that in mind. Thanks for the point out

Thank you blue. I'm slightly confused on what you're saying about Malcolm? Everyone in the town kinda feels like Devlin showed up then Potter's Creek got burnt to a crisp ...