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OK, this is great! you hooked me real good, pretty much from the start. This setting really is mysteriously interesting. The assassin is intriguing, mysterious, she seems at first totally ...

Hey, Malachi here to review on your poem, that is short but beautiful. So, you take a bunch of random things, yet put them all together perfectly. I like how ...

OK, here to review this. This was a nice poem. I myself have written a poem on sunsets, it's taken from a different view, but this one was just as ...

This is sad, but very honoring poem of all those who have died in the service. You explain the whole story very well, your last paragraph is really good, and ...

OK, I got 1 line down and had to stop. I eyed, should be connected with your next line. I see that happens a few times. I would suggest not ...

this chapter is very good. I like that although we don't know a lot about Tessa, you still don't give us a history of her, and yet I still get ...

OK, here to review. This isn't like any of your other writing, but never mind about that. I have to say I'm not really that interested in the story at ...

Hey, unlike most prologues this one is not an info dump about the history of your story, which is great. Your description of the setting is superb. Even the little ...

OK, wow, that was really good! It's an interesting point of view, but I like it. However, I'm a little confused as to your rhyming. At first I thought it ...

This is really good paradox. it captures love very well, and the way you describe it is very nice. It’s a double edged sword, can drive a man to death ...

This was awesome! you are so descriptive, every line goes perfectly with the next one (something that honestly isn't easy to do at all) the rhymes are all just right. ...

I have to say this poem was well done, (although I don't necessarily agree with it all) but the descriptive words really bring the poem to life. But I have ...

This wasn't a long poem, but masterfully done. The words you used to describe then new world were perfect for catching the feeling you wanted. I see you made lines ...

This is great and funny. Your rhyming was all good except for this one line. There are only five empty slots, but no way to tell which is full I ...

hmm . . . At first I was a bit upset, thinking the character wouldn't be able to remember anything for a while. But then he went back to the ...