Messenger

This is an interesting prologue that quickly gets the reader into the story, and feeling for the main character (MC). It seems like just when she gets settled a little ...

Just from the reviews I've sen this looked like a really good chapter, and I was wasn't disappointed. I like the conversation between Aria and Derin, but it seems like ...

This was just another great chapter, Sushi! The Gardilla are pretty creepy, and a perfect fit for the story. I feel bad for Aria and Derin, and feel AAAAARGH!!! at ...

OK, so I was into the fight, it was adrenaline-rushing, Derin started fighting, and there was a sad moment as the other raiders began to go down. Then Aria appeared ...

This is a great follow-up to your prologue. This story seems pretty interesting, but i have a few problems with it. 1. Why, if Aria is feeling so bad, is ...

The very first paragraph is really good. I don't think that it was necessary to put Soske's name in their. Sometimes it's better to wait, but it isn't a huge ...

WOW! Talk about a great first chapter to lure in any reader. From the first words I was intrigued. By the end I was stunned. The last Aline was not ...

This was a great poem about serenity, and where you can find it. I always love well described poems, so I liked this, and I always love well described poems ...

This is a great follow-up to your prologue. It skips several years, but since it doesn't seem like much has happened that's fine. Very well written, but I think you ...

This prologue leaves you wondering and wanting more, so great job on that. I can for the most part, envision the setting, but I have no idea what the MC ...

"Whatever advantage she’d had or could have garnered from the situation, she’d succinctly burnt it into crisp ashes, then ground the ash into powder, thrown the powder to the wind ...

This chapter is really good! I like how it shows more of Ren's background, what's going through her head, her struggle to do right, and Marcy is a lovable character ...

OK, glad you switched the font so it's not all bold. Now, I noticed a few spots where you wrote in the present tense. for example: The fastest I could ...

OK, here to review this awesome poem. This left you hanging. Do you dare what? Your first stanza was amazing. I loved the touches about the outside. So it began ...

OK, great description here! This poem hooks you the first line. The comparison of a lady and mist went together great, and I loved the story of how the mist ...