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Re: I want
Messenger here for ya! I was just meandering in your portfolio and came across this. The first few lines caught my attention so I had to read it. And it ...
Jan 14, 2014 -
Re: Fantasticas: The Boy And His Staff
Messenger here for ya, as requested! . . . hastily scraped his muddy boots on the doormat outside his home, . . . still hopelessly covered in mud as he ...
Jan 13, 2014 -
Re: christmas woz dead dis year
Horrendous found this funny, but I didn't. Particularly the part about the kids who need food and water. That is a very real sad thing that is going on, and ...
Jan 12, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 1 - Losing Home
Hiya! Messenger here to review for ya! which put our family into a state not of panic, but of preparation; This line seems kind of messed up. The part about ...
Jan 12, 2014 -
Re: Perfect Love
Messenger here to review for ya! I was really happy to see another song up by you, because I hadn't seen any in a while it seemed like. So, review: ...
Jan 11, 2014 -
Re: Lights Went Off.
The Messenger here to review for ya! So, I really like your idea here. It is a spooky idea, and leaving no explanation is fine. It adds to the suspense. ...
Jan 11, 2014 -
Re: Girl of Sunshine
Messenger here to review for Ya! Well this was short. A lot shorter than most poems, but you know what? It was just as good. One thing I am really ...
Jan 11, 2014 -
Re: Feeling
Messenger here to review for ya! So, I felt that although ( as CamorynAnn said) I love the descriptive words, and that you were able to bring every emotion in ...
Jan 11, 2014 -
Re: Granite tears (title pending) - chapter one
Hi. Messenger here to review for ya! First thing I noticed was that you kept on going in and out of past tense and present tense. It really makes things ...
Jan 9, 2014 -
Re: Winter Kingdom--Prologue
Hi. Messenger here to review for ya! Only the sign remains, rotted away from years of abuse, cocked to one side crookedly. Out in the middle of what had been ...
Jan 9, 2014 -
Re: Mr. President
Messenger here to review. Whooooooooooa! That was long and full of stuff. OK, so, you switch from past tense to present back and forth like crazy. Form the most part ...
Jan 8, 2014 -
Re: Strangers
Messenger here to review! So . . . uh . . . I read this, and then read it again, and I am not getting it. It was actually very ...
Jan 8, 2014 -
Re: America's Cup Here We Come Chapter 1
Hi! Messenger here to review for you today! so! Her crew, David grabbed the jib sheet and they pushed off from the dock. This line makes no sense. I'm not ...
Jan 8, 2014 -
Re: Batman
Hiya, Messenger here to review for ya! So first off I LOVE Batman. Sadly I have barely read any of the comics he is in. But I love the Christopher ...
Jan 8, 2014 -
Re: Blood's Sweet Poison
I am here to review for ya! BTW that picture is terrifying. Did he feel as if he, almost, owed the world for being so sickeningly arrogant Messed up wording ...
Jan 8, 2014
