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Re: Sniper: Prologue (2/3)
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a quick review today. This honestly feels more like a first chapter than a prologue. You do a good job of establishing ...
Sep 29, 2017 -
Re: Warriors: Rise - Chapter 1
Hey there! I saw this was a Warriors fanfiction, and so of course I couldn't resist even though it's been years since I read the series. I like that you ...
Sep 27, 2017 -
Re: Stray part 2 / A fictional tale from the perspective of a street dog
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a review today. I've read both parts of this story, so I'm able to comment on it as a whole. :D I ...
Sep 27, 2017 -
Re: Man Eater
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a quick review today. The first thing I really liked about this was your character's voices - they're quite strong right off ...
Sep 26, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 8.1: Gael
Hey Light! It's kind of weird to have a flashback like this, so I'm guessing that you're planning to put this where it belongs chronologically for the second draft, and ...
Sep 25, 2017 -
Re: Belief
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a quick review today. Honestly, this is a pretty solid short story. It's perhaps not particularly deep, but it makes its point ...
Sep 24, 2017 -
Re: General Behind Me#1 Dirty Hands
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a quick review today. I like that you dive right in with conflict - we already know what some of Wendolyn's problems ...
Sep 24, 2017 -
Re: Finding Home
Hey there - thought I'd drop by for a quick review today. First thought - this is a good story and I was surprised people haven't noticed it really. Something ...
Sep 23, 2017 -
Re: Realms; Dark Times Follow
Hey Kira! I thought I'd drop by and review this today. I like your philosophical opening and the introduction of the Kings by this unknown narrator, particularly how he/she is ...
Sep 22, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 7.2: Felaris
Hey Light.
Sep 22, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 4.2
Hey Silver! Just dropping by for a quick review today. I like how Eremia is paying enough attention to let the reader draw conclusions about all the political stuff, even ...
Sep 20, 2017 -
Re: Treslam (Part 2)
Okay, wow . I love every part of this. I was thinking that the pacing was way to fast, but then I remembered this was a short story, and for ...
Sep 20, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 7 - Burdens
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a quick review today. In terms of story and character, this is an extremely strong and engaging chapter. Your characters and their ...
Sep 19, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 7.1: Felaris
And I'm back again. :D This was a solid part overall. We learn valuable information and the characters continue to come through strong and clear in their actions. Felaris and ...
Sep 18, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 6.2: Ilami
Hey Light! I'm here as always for my review. :D I like how we get to see more of the school in this chapter - it just fleshes out the ...
Sep 18, 2017