Master_Yoda

Hi Lauren You, like Natura, are special. You tell this story well, and it is a pleasure to read. Despite the fact that I very rarely enjoy first person narrations, ...

Hell, Monkey, you write well. I really don't think you need much help with this piece, as I found it to be remarkable, intriguing, and any other positive compliment you ...

Hi There Matthemus Since I've taken a liking to you, I'm going to do something that I don't normally do for you. I'm going to nitpick your piece. So let's ...

Hi Matthemus Welcome to YWS. I'm sure you will make yourself at home here. Now with out further ado, here's the review. :) In your prologued, you have successfully highlighted ...

Hi Sapsan Firstly, I'd like to compliment you on your ability to paint a picture of what is happening so adeptly. I'm not going to nitpick your story, but I ...

Hi Horserider This is a really nice start. You writing is strong, and your narration is sound. I'm not really sure of the effect that you're trying to create here ...

Hello there Welcome to YWS. Now let's start the review. This piece is short, so I don't suggest that I will do it justice. But let's take what we have ...

Hi Everyone I thought the Kite Runner was a brilliant work of literary genius, and was blown away by its depth and attention to detail with regard to emotions and ...

Hi There, Well done on crafting such a piece. I really find it to be beautiful, and heart wrenching at the same time. the boy gripped swishing his shaggy auburn ...

Hi Stori While this opening is short, it is pretty effective. In fact, although I would under normal circumstances complain about the amount of dialogue, I don't think that it ...

Hi Stori, As Blink and daydreamer have both said, there is far too high a concentration of dialogue in this piece. I would elaborate, but Blink has said it far ...

Hi there Stori, This is a very nice piece, I'd just like to make one suggestion. Maybe you should switch: Doesn't anyone remember Avari Tigersong? with: Does anyone remember Avari? ...

Hello there madel! Welcome to YWS. Before I even review this I'd like to point out that correct punctuation can really help you make your point, and is an invaluable ...

Hi There Vox :) I really like the idea of this piece, and you also write beautifully and eloquently which makes it a pleasure to read. That said, I don't ...

The fourth book in the Maximum Ride saga, The Final Warning. It wasn't like it was badly written, but Mr. Patterson kept trying to preach about global warming in almost ...