Mars

I like this...it's a fairly overused subject, which some YWSers will crucify you for, but I think you've written about it well, so kudos. I do have a few suggestions: ...

Ohhh....you got me. I'll bite. And I will bite *evil laugh; cracks knuckles* Trapped in these four walls, Not knowing where to turn, There is nothing left for me, At ...

Hey Stephixy! I don't know why no one has reviewed this yet....but they haven't. So it's up to me. :shock: Hope you don't want to kill me by the end ...

Hi! I'm KTW and I'll be reviewing your poem today. Drifting on soft clouds, Lies a city of love. Its frantic heart beat is that of a family. 'heartbeat' is ...

Hey hobbes. I get to critique your poem. I loved it. It's funny and original (a refreshing break from the depression poems we seem to get all the time) so ...

Hiya. I'm reviewing your piece (obviously). I noticed a lot of grammar mistakes, and I couldn't really concentrate on the storyline, so I'm just going to point those out: His ...

Hi :) I think your plot is pretty good and I'm excited to see what happens! So for this review I'll just point out a few icky grammar things: Quote: ...

Hello! First off, I want to let you know that we have a rule at YWS that you have to have at least 2 reviews before you post your own ...

Wow. I mean, wow. That was great-I liked the way you played with rhyme and metaphor. Really good. It sounds like a song, and you said it was a ballad-just ...

Hello! I get the pleasure of reviewing your poem today :) Just a couple of thoughts, to begin with: fire touched tongue licking, I like this line: it gives me ...

Hi, I'm reviewing your poem :) First off, I do want to say that I think this poem is really good, it just needs a couple of reviews; so bear ...

This reads more like a blog entry than a poem. Try breaking it up a bit for emphasis instead of using capital letters. Also, you're telling, not really showing. Inject ...

Hiya! I have the pleasure of reviewing your work tonight. :) *breathes in that new poem smell* Okay. Here we go. There will come a time when the world will ...

Hello Mercury! Welcome to YWS. I'm Carrie and I'm reviewing your poem :) Wow, this poem is super-long, can't wait to really get into it *cracks knuckles* Before I begin, ...

Hey kloka! Since this piece is unfinished, it's a little hard to review. But here I go. I like the concept that you have here, and I think you could ...