MarGeo

Hi! Just to start off, I loved this! It may seem that there are a lot of corrections but I just copied and pasted as I went along so you ...

This made me cry. It was heart breaking but somewhat reassuring she learned from her parent's mistakes. Dreams truly are so important. This story was important and I sort of ...

First off, SPECTACULAR! I loved the story and I love plot twists so much. This was great. It was well written too, which I appreciate. Some times there are stories ...

This was very powerful and really left a mark on me. I myself am bisexual and though I have not been abused to this extent for my bisexuality, I have ...

Whoa. Just whoa. I have some corrections but all I can say is whoa. ----- "Please(,) (Just) stay where you are." Please needs a comma then you indent if you ...

This was interesting story and suspense was present the entire time, but unless there is a second part (if there is YES, I want to read it) then there isn't ...

That was powerful. I don't really know how to react. I have some corrections but over all this was very powerful and hit me hard. ----- (No And) Despite it ...

This is a sweet story but do have some corrections ------ "I think he'll listen to you." Should have who is saying it and how they say it. "When has ...

"Foul, mindless shadow. You broke my father. He nearly broke me, yet he was kind; you were not." There should be another comma between mindless and shadow. The commas and ...

"Everywhere he has followed me. Through school, and love and even work. At church I was often an absentee. It’s where I got it the worst, damn that clerk!" There ...

This was very intresting story. I do have some corrections. Maybe give us a sense that her brother was brave and that is why the narrator would want to do ...

I loved this! I love every story I've come across in here so far, to be honest. I think it's because I appreciate everyone's writing style and thought process. I ...

I thought this was cute and very descriptive! I do have a few notes you might want to take into consideration: WHA?! Should be WHAT "But why would I be ...

I liked this :) . I do recommend that every thought was finished in a line. Or that a one thought end and the beginning of another thought in one ...

This was very good. I would like to saw that the line "crept up, so free." So free should be on the next line to keep up with your pattern. ...