MajorKillaClown

Thanks for reading my chapter LLZ and that's good to hear that you're enjoying it! Also I'm sorry for the late reply I only just got back from holiday which ...

sorry for the late reply I was on holiday at school and wow this is a big review so thanks for all of the feedback! :)

ah thanks for the review braydog :D and yeah there are a few typos I've noticed whilst looking back through it, if I find time I'll try and amend it. ...

ah thanks for the review Alex! I agree with what you said, I do probably need to do a bit more work on my dialogue if I want my story ...

yeah I know the plot doesn't seem totally original but as the story progresses you're going to see it become really unique and the more recent chapters of mine are ...

I liked this as it was a sort of nice and brief poem that was pretty realistic and easily understandable which makes it very reader friendly as they're not stuck ...

ah okay, so his job is working on computers then?

ah I see what you did at the end, and it was really clever! I never expected that to happen aha, okay now down to the review. I really liked ...

Thanks and yeah I will be giving quite a bit of back story. I am planning to give every elementalist a background story and the creator himself is going to ...

yeah if you get the chance I'd appreciate if you review any one of my chapters of the story I'm doing, many thanks

Thanks for the feedback it's appreciated, and yeah it may seem a bit pointless and boring, all of these descriptions about Ben's life and other things but they'll become essential ...

Thanks for the feedback I shall get around to doing some editing and fixing the grammar mistakes, and as for the games themselves they will start on chapter 4. At ...

yeah don't worry things really spice up a lot in the upcoming chapters, you don't know what's going to happen around the corner it'll really surprise you and keep you ...

thanks and yeah I'll try my best to work on the grammar. It's my first time doing anything like this so it'll take me a while to learn all the ...