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Re: Gray : Past One
Hey there, Lycando here to review! I really really really like this! You had me hooked from the start and left me hanging at the end! I'm dangling upon the ...
Feb 1, 2015 -
Re: Death is the beginning (Prologue)
Hey there, Lycando here to review! Okay first off there were some punctuation mistakes that made certain sentences sound kind of weird. looking down at the angel cascaded in a ...
Feb 1, 2015 -
Re: Tales of Aleron: lone against the world
Hey there, Lycando here to review! Alright so first off, there were a couple of grammatical mistakes here and there... Once before he had fled before the enemy. You don't ...
Jan 27, 2015 -
Re: The Truth Within a Lie: Chapter 3
Hey there, Lycando here to review! Right, I'll start on the nitpicks first! Unlike the rest of the day, time begins to slow in this class. I wouldn't use begin ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: The Door To Arabeth
Hey there, Lycando here to review! I really liked how you started off with that air of mystery, it got me hooked up straight off! But I agree with steampowered, ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: Inevitable Outcome Part 01: Flight (Edited)
Hey there, here to review! Okay so I shall critique each part first, followed by the piece as a whole! My head hurt as if someone put a metal rod ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: Knife Edge Boogie - Chapter 1
Hey there, here to review! I like what you have going on here, it's a good mixture of dialogue, narration and conflict. The character build up here is good, especially ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: The Adventures of Robin Brawl: Chapter 4
Hey there, here to review! Wow, I must say that even though I understood where this was headed, there were some major parts that stood out for me. ‘Don’t say, ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: TFoA - Chapter 2 (Part 2 of 2) REVISED
Hey there, back to review the second part! I like how you started off with the interaction. Gets the reader straight into seeing how the characters behave and also reveal ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: TFoA - Chapter 2 (Part 1 of 2) REVISED
Hey there, here to review! I really liked this piece, even though there wasn't any use of bombastic words or extremely vivid imagery. It was just this simplicity that was ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: You Gave It All
Hey there, here to review! I really like this lyrical piece, given that I'm a Christian myself :P The only critique I can really give here is probably grammar and ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: Dare To Dream
Oh my...I really really loved this. Okay first of all let me begin by saying that you've touched on a topic which I myself am very interested in, freedom of ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: The Dream Maker : Chapter Two
Hey there, here to review! I really liked this piece! Now I'm not a huge fan of fantasy due to the fact that the stories sometimes get too draggy but ...
Jan 25, 2015 -
Re: The Blockbuster Writer
Hey there, I really like this! I think this really gets the reader thinking about what success truly is. It's a thought provoking story that embodies a greater meaning. However ...
Jan 24, 2015 -
Re: Trail Mix Chapter 2: Cranberries
Hey there, here to review! I didn't read Chapter 1 so my critique will be solely based on this chapter alone. To start things off, I can't say there's really ...
Jan 24, 2015
