Lucky_Duck

The first stanza was really good. my friend and i made something similar to that before... Anyways I agree with everyone else. it is a little bit choppy and the ...

Okay that was really good. What was up with the whole did not't thing, it's didn't . Any way the whole thing was really interesting. towards the end, when she ...

Hey M.B. that was really good!(even if it was possibly written about me) Sorry i missed the time, i forgot I had a school concert to go to. Oops! See ...

You're new here right? Apparently no one has told you that you shouldn't write LONG posts. Some people get bored and stop in the middle. I actually managed to finish ...

That was really good. I'm really starting to like Asriel (sorry if its mispelled) Same thing about the whole mind reading part, I think you should work on that a ...

Wow that was really good. Everyone thinks that you read Maximum Ride but I'm guessing Twilight!!! I love twilight but i don't really side with the werewolves I'm more of ...

That was realy looks like everyone already pointed out the mistakes that you made so all I really have to tell you is keep up the good work. PM me ...

That was really good. It makes me think of a book I was recently reading titled 'New Moon'. If you're into vampire action/ romantic books I suggest that series ('New ...

That was really good for a person who is just starting Haiku... I think that my friend wrote something worse than that, which is saying a lot becuase in haikus ...

Hey MB!!! It is too bad that you were in such a hurry that you couldn't fix any mistakes, I bet you were also tired. Anyway, that was pretty good, ...

That was really great. very insightful,and all that. :D Great description and depth. Hope to see more of your writing! -- Lucky_Duck 8)

Hey,I'm not going to make this too long because I don't have that much time. That was really good,you know, the main idea and stuff.The characters are great too but ...

Very interesting. I liked it a lot, but at a point i thought that you used "Alas" a little too much. That basically sums it up for me. ( everyone ...