Lucky_Duck

Hi there! First off, I love the overall theme and commentary you're making here. So many conversations feel surface level, and when you're going through something or struggling with depression, ...

Hello! This is such a great, succinct poem. I don't know why, but my brain tripped up on the first few lines: "When time calls a final meeting with the ...

Hi there :) I'm going to just jump right in. I love short poetry as long as it's effective and I think you did a pretty good job. It's a ...

Hi there! This had so much emotion behind it and, being someone who has been in a similar situation emotionally, it's definitely relatable. The title doesn't really work for the ...

Hi there! I loved that your poem has such a distinctive voice! The numbers worked to your advantage and everything you described was both relatable and distinct to the situation. ...

Hi there! This poem is paced so well, which is so important in poetry. There are just a few things that stick out: 1. The small typos/spelling mistakes throughout the ...

Hi :) I liked this. Very short, very simple, yet effective in communicating the emotion behind it. I could easily relate to the first line. I think it easily identifies ...

Hi there :) I'm guessing you were inspired by Easter? I loved the ongoing imagery related to the sea, it definitely tied the whole poem together and gave it a ...

Hi there :) I really like it and it has good potential, with some slight editing. The way the poem reads because of the format is slightly choppy, but I ...

Hi there! Wow, it's been a long time since I've been on here, so forgive me if I'm rusty. I really like the beginning of this poem. The metaphor of ...

Hey enjeru! Another chapter, I see. It was good and, like nariel said, it was just a little choppy. I like Edward better (after New Moon, I wanted to kick ...

That was much better than chapter one. I agree with Fangala about the whole Charlie/Jacob thing, but overall it was a really nice. I'm so glad that you finally posted ...

That was really good. I agree with ST, though. I feel as if this scripture should follow the poem, to answer who god gave us: John 3:16 For God so ...

Yeah!! Twilight!! I love Edward and Jacob!! Go team Switzerland!! Whoot! Anyway.. out of the girls my favorite characters are (out of all 3 books; not in order) Angela, Alice, ...

keep it up, that was really good. Can't wait to find out what will happen. by the way, what's with the whole moldy cakish thing?? No one in their right ...