Lucia

This was very interesting, and kept my attention to the end. Your words colorfully bring classic island scenery to my mind, but not in a overused way. I also like ...

This prologue appears to be the introduction to a very imaginative, interesting tale. It allows you to soak in what I suspect is the entire concept of the story, but ...

Verrrrry interesting....... ;) I noticed that you introduced some more new ideas, namely, actual love between Boo and Sully? Wow... I won't say I didn't see that one coming at ...

Thank you for writing this. To me, you portrayed the burning sense of loyalty with such realism. I enjoyed that, within all of this confusion, the patriot found solid ground ...

This has an intriguing sort of potential, but it needs a bit of work. Firstly, the nitpicks. You have only a couple pf spelling errors (at least I think they ...

This is very interesting so far, and I really want to start reading the next one! The fact that you wrote it from the little girl's point of view is ...

I like your story so far. You captured some of Rick Riordan's style of humor, and I enjoyed it, especially the part where you wrote, "I'm-gonna-get-you-and-yo'-friends-are-gonna-watch-while-I-laugh-cr

Okay. Let me see if I got this right. "True Happiness" is contentment? If so, I definitely like the message. If not, please let me know what it is. "Twisting ...

This sounds like it will be a very interesting read. I see you are going to try developing a "theory" about time and death, and I'm curious to know what ...

Wow.... that was.. fast. I liked it, the story was interesting, and the way Luke can sense certain things happening is pretty cool, although I wonder why he can. To ...

I definitely like where this is going. This was a good idea for a book, and I'm glad you decided to act on it. :) I would polish it off ...

This sounds really good! The story seems well thought through and realistic in a dark way. Chilam's thoughts, words and actions are perfectly in sync with her emotions. Her bitterness, ...

I like your honesty on your feeling about YWS, and the way you get right to the point. Before I go on to the nitpick section, I'll just mention that ...

I noticed that there wasn't as much to describe in colorful detail, but you still did a good job. I thought it was a very imaginative twist to have everything ...

So far, this is very intriguing. I've tampered with idea of people living in the earth, but I decided I didn't have the guts or patience to attempt it. But ...