LowKey

First, the nit-piks, then thoughts and what I liked. And believe me, I really did like this. The tone you set at the beginning was perfect, and that you were ...

“You…you cooked him?” That made me laugh. XD And cheers for not having the guy confess or make an obvious lie about being the thing. And this one is even ...

Me? Late? Neeever :P Dracen bounded out the door, two leather bags tied loosely around her belt and a pin in her dark hair keeping it pinned off of her ...

The terrain was rough and hilly, and it made Kerry shake a little, even though she’d lived in Bowness, which was a small town on the shores of Lake Windmere, ...

Daisy stretched her arms above her head, her barely there, glitter covered dress rising just above her buttock. Missing a word? That, or you need hyphens. "...I have a pretty ...

Aw, cute. :) Crit now, thoughts later, yes? There are these two things called Alliteration and Assonance, and they're what give a poem a poetic feel. They're really awesome, and ...

Ninja's come. Don't think that's anyone's line, but in a rare moment of catching an error, I'll point out the apostrophe. :P haha, funny. Love it. the car bit with ...

Aww. :( Writing first, thoughts later. That was the night i realized you meant something ti me. And i thought i meant something to you. To, yes? Also, your i's. ...

Well said. This should be a sticky in the Welcome forum, or the Information Desk. Hear, hear! Nice job, Evi. Love it. Line-by-line translation of the bill of rights. Brilliant. ...

Hiya! I squeezed my eye’s even tighter shut and prayed that no one would come into my room tonight. No need for the apostrophe. Plural = eyes. Singular possessive (if ...

Allo! "Hey Peyton, do you think he realises he just said 'goodnight' instead on 'good afternoon' in Spanish?" " I chuckled, and glanced at the clock. “I know! It's three ...

E: I’m Edward, a transfer student from a parallel universe. Or at least that’s what Professor Loopy said. I just wanted to tell you, that you put too much powder ...

Won't make fun of it, but will give you my thoughts. The beginning feels a bit rough still. Needs some tuning up. The writing gets smoother as the story goes ...

He put his books, manuals, and manuscripts on the shelves, and they now occupied most of the given space.[/quote] Tense switch. He tried no to feel guilty as he stood ...

Fur-ry cute things you. :P [quote[He walked up to the person, who he saw on a name tag she conveniently had, was named Ary- excuse me, Lilah. He then said, ...