Lost_in_dreamland

I'm back. Right; I rather enjoyed this poem. It was light and impulsive, and not intended to carry any deeper meaning than it appeared on the surface. That said, I ...

It wasn't ready yet, so I'm back to review :) Now, there were a few grammar errors that I didn't catch, and a few phrasing errors that I didn't catch, ...

Okay, at first I thought this poem was about a dreamer, the books &c. This was furthered by the line that reads "of the beasts will electrify only your flesh ...

Actually, just ignore my review, I thought it signified something it didn't. A tree. I like it as a tree, it's the correct length &c. The meaning is nice and ...

Hi, I'm back, so I may end up accidentally repeating some of what I've already said, for which I am sorry. Anyway, let's see: I like the style. It's original. ...

Kirsten - Why are you so kind? You're always such a considerate, complimentary critiquer, and to be on the receiving end of one of your critiques is such a warm, ...

canislupis thanks so much for the review :D I had to take it down because it might be included in coursework which is sent to the national exam board, anything ...

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'Kay, I touched on a few grammar issues above, but most certainly not them all. You need to do that. Before posting on YWS I recommend you check your spelling ...

I missed out on another point I wanted to make: It's very hard to put the right grammar in your poem. Let's take the start for example: Depleted I am ...

Finally I am here ;) I'll try and make this long to make up for taking ages to do it :( So, let's start :) General impressions I loved it ...

Back :) This time I'm going to concentrate on setting, so I shall start with the first setting and work onwards. Shall we start? :) Quote Scene is set in ...

Finally I have started this, and I'm sorry about taking so long. xD I've decided just to start again from the beginning, seeing as my first critique wasn't very good, ...

'kay, I'm back :) So, let's run over some of the basics... Imagery This is a point that I think could really make your story. Using imagery would vastly improve ...

I've not forgotten about you, Angel.xD Just been really busy with school :twisted: I will get round to it eventually, and make sure you bug me about it ;) xxx