Yay! I'm sure I've never had so many critiques in my life. xD
Demeter - Oh, thanks for the critique! I always find those review for food things a bit impertinent, hehe, so am glad you chose to critique. Will bear your nit-picks (as well as everyone else's) in mind when I edit before the deadline. I wondered about your wondering on the "function of this story"---what function do any stories have, but to entertain and form a kind of escapism? I hope I did not fail there. Again, thank you.
Rosey Unicorn - Hi, thank you. I agree the nit-picks have been coming fast and steady... I am quite unused to one of my lil' tales getting quite so much attention, teehee. Funny you said that about lack of name use---I thought it was quite the opposite! Will bear in mind what you say about commas, although comma-use is widely debated and I believe that people may use them in different quantities. Think 'Old Man and the Sea', and then compare it to a Jane Austen or 'Moll Flanders'! Thanks.
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