Liz

Really good. The best part about this poem was the tone, you really pulled off a constant one. Galatea's right though: "disseminating" disrupted it. It's a cool word, but doesn't ...

Cool idea. That's pretty much all it is. The last line is nice. ohhewwo's right: you need an adjective in front of the angel, otherwise the flow is broken. It ...

Thanks guys. Dreami: don't worry, I don't think you're being too critical! I like constructive criticism, it really helps. The thing is, my poetry makes complete sense to me and ...

This is beautiful. Everything is expressed really well, and I love the concept. Just to find something wrong...the second stanza's line-breaks could be re-thought. They just don't fit that well ...

Tsk, tsk. Nice one, Brad.

I liked the concept and all, but it was dragged out. That might have been a technique but it does seem like pointless rambling after a while. Very well-written rambling ...

Yeah, it an an innocent quality to it which added to the poem. Good concept, well expressed.

Simple yet emotive.

Not bad. I just think it needs a bit of the moment it's everyday-conversation kind of thing. You need some images etc. Nice idea though, keep the conversational tone and ...

I agree with started off well but it kind of read as a bit of a joke from then on. I like the image of grinding glass into your eyes ...

Hmm not bad. I found it kind of pointless, and that can be good sometimes, but this wasn't hugely interesting. Cute though. Nice job.

Yeah, very thought-provoking and original. I liked it a lot.

Full of cliches yet nice in a way. Just take out the &s (come on, it's not that hard to write "and") and add a bit of interest and it'll ...

Thanks, everyone. This was actually written for a competition with a strict word limit, so that's why I didn't get to put in as much detail as I would have ...

:) Fair enough, like I said. I get you.