Published February 19, 2005
12-9-04
Home smells percolate in the fresh hot biscuit bliss-drive
explode with the world in a mind too full of wonder
to be afraid of the screaming outs and ins.
Lust is surpassed in his little world that demands attention,
that’s as real as he is, and that’s as real as the lust.
He bounces with it, his teeth chatter,
he hangs on in an ultimate saturation of world-truths,
and he’s ultimately himself, safe from
the ping-pong, manically-dissected
desert cross-section of reality which he’ll find en su escuela.
Reindeer dance into the Christmas season
beneath mud-red, snowy leaves of blossoming elegant death
in surgical cigar-exhalations of the school bus, returning home
with the world’s most electric, eclectic, eccentric wildcard
in the battle against
Chimneys funnel into the sky a hint of olden times
with ciders and beers and friends, adult and young
whispering (with yells) that they can accept it
and swish, swish, swirl into stunning radiance
when Santa Clause needs a day to rest his feet.
And it’s a Thursday afternoon in a place
that tells a trillion tales, the lucky ones possessed.
The Universe cannot exist without every other bit,
and electro-static, digital cough-syrup keeps down the whimpers
from the unwiser kin. The hearth
isn’t there, but the fluffy warmth is
with hot coco steeping and soft snow collecting
and it’s a Thursday afternoon
in a mind that knows what that means.
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Hi!
I really liked this poem. The word choice was really strong, and it carried a certain tone that I liked. The imagery is very strong, and it brought me back to vivid places and filled my mind with memories that I didn't even know I had still. My favorite lines were the ending ones. I loved the way you ended the poem! Keep up the good work!
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Yeah, very thought-provoking and original. I liked it a lot.
See, i got a wow and a...
HA HA!!!!
Loved it, PsyLynx. It's very interesting to say the least.
Gosh sam, the best you could do would be to say something USEFUL for once...*sigh*
Great poem.
woow. this was lovely. taken back...love the words you use, nice choice of them. i hae nothing bad to say about it lol. this is really good... *taken back*