Livinginfantasy

That... Was... Brilliant! You captured Bella and Edward, and your writing style did fit Stephenie's quite nicely. Fav Parts! “ How’s your foot?” he asked, so low only I could ...

I LOVE IT! That was beautiful. Who said this needed a lot of work? Sure, there's always room for improvement, but in my honest opinion, this is near perfect. That ...

Hello Novice! First, I must say... Change the title. I feel it's too blunt. I don't know, I don't think it's really important, but just something to take into consideration. ...

Demeter stole the words right from under my fingertips. An aphorism I think best describes this, not a poem. But hey, that doesn't mean I don't like it! :wink: *Pokes* ...

Can you hear her crying, crying in the dark? Can you hear her whisper, pouring out her heart? You disgust me! Though I shouldn't judge. The way you treat her; ...

I like. I like it alot! Very nice topic. Nice description also. The suspension was very well done, but there's one thing that threw me off. Like JFW1415 said: A ...

Thanks for mailing me. I'm glad to read another one of your poems! Now, first I must say, this compared to 'Scream' was.... plain (for lack of a better word). ...

Woah. :shock: You were some twelve year old... I liked it. Very interesting. The voice is amazing, I feel that was the best part. Also, some of your word choice ...

Yikes! Sorry to hear that. I haven't gone through anything like this before, but I can sympathize. That must suck. It's a good thing you let your emotions out, but ...

Nice ending, but your intro wasn't strong and is overused. Just a quick expression I needed to let out, not much effort behind it, just instinct. Please tell me what ...

This is too vague. The emotions are undeveloped. I feel all you did was scratch the surface. This needs deeper meaning... and originality. One part I did like was the ...

Welcome to YWS! I'm sure others will be drilling you about the 2:1 ratio, so I'll just be getting to the review. This isn't very good in my opinion. 1. ...

Okay, first I must say... that repetition hurt. I seriously have a headache right now. Repetition works, it helps make a point, but not when you do so many, many ...

That title was horrendous! At least put in an A/N that is the only poem I'll hear from you, not as the title, please! Now on to the review! It ...

I honestly didn't find anything wrong. At least something that sticks out to me. I like how it has some kind of hidden message while trying to lighten the mood ...