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Re: The Secret Service page #1
Ooh, a sly tale! So, so, we've got this...sly character with their brown wool coat at the tavern. The beginning starts off with this character in one of the lighted ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: Goldfish Getaway
Hello! Prepare for a review! To begin with, let's start out with the title! It's a nicely selected one, it considers the poem's subject--obviously a goldfish for a subject as ...
May 25, 2014 -
Re: Dull Pencils
Hey, at least you made use of your time during the test xD Anyways, onwards to the review! This definitely humored me, being that I have this feeling, too. The ...
Mar 24, 2014 -
Re: Deleted
I like how you take a cruel topic such as this one and turn it into a decent poem all the while. I left reading this poem with the impression....of ...
Mar 23, 2014 -
Re: Alone and Unwanted
When I was reading this, each word felt powerful but coming from somewhere deep. The notion you provide the readers with is well-developed and supported, building up until the poem's ...
Mar 23, 2014 -
Re: to my ex
Ooookay, I see how this particular poem was listed under dramatic XD Moving on, the subject of the poem was very unclear. First of all, the title was misleading. You ...
Mar 23, 2014 -
Re: freedom
I read this poem feeling, as sunshine said, powerful. You supported your poem with an effective message, all the while sticking to the subject and title of the poem. Your ...
Mar 23, 2014 -
Re: The Pain of Waking Up
Wow, my first impression of the poem was almost suspenseful. It had an overall mystery surrounding it and in the end, especially that concluding line, I felt satisfied with this ...
Mar 23, 2014 -
Re: Valley of Death
This was an entertaining short story with both a tone and writing style that I now commend. Though at first I was uncertain of what the story was going to ...
Mar 22, 2014 -
Re: The Dare
Though I have read many stories, both short and long, revolving around a dare, this was a different take from the rest. You don't necessarily focus on the external conflict ...
Mar 22, 2014 -
Re: Four Years Ago
This was actually an amazing song. I really felt for the speaker of the song and the particular memories that she buried up from four years ago were fitting. The ...
Mar 22, 2014 -
Re: One single human emotion
You chose a very deep topic to dive into and it's promising. I enjoyed it, however, like all literary works, there's always room for improvement. Hopefully, you'll consider the following ...
Mar 21, 2014 -
Re: What If I Don't Want to Smile?
This was one of the few poems that not only appealing, it was riveting my inner thoughts. You don't use a formal tone either, which is the better choice in ...
Mar 21, 2014 -
Re: Melody
Very intriguing notions you have in this poem. It's novelty from what I've read thus far as well. Melody is a song I played only once. Maybe, if you wish, ...
Mar 20, 2014 -
Re: Four verses of sadness ( The man with no fare )
I like your formatting! It seems both fitting and somewhat better this way. I really like this poem. You were undeviating throughout the poem and focused on the general themes ...
Mar 20, 2014
