Lil_Pau

Yes, it really has a lot of imagery. I liked it. Keep up the good work!

Alright, I'll tell you... This poem is actually a reference to World War II (Hitler era)...sorry if it was not that clear, maybe I need more 'training'. Ooops! :oops: :oops: ...

Thanks (to all who reviewed my work!) :D :D

O...OK then. I'll take your advice. Thanks for commenting, anyway! :)

Thanks! :D When I wrote this poem, it was almost midnight and I was getting sleepy. So I looked outside, it was cloudy and I kinda got the inspiration from ...

Thanks for reviewing! :oops: O yeah, I think I double-posted this.

:D OK, thanks for reviewing!

O...that's kinda true anyway... Well, thanks for reviewing! :)

Wow. I really like this piece. It's beautiful and very emotive. Keep up the good work!

Great poem. Good imagery and structure. I wish the world was really like what you wrote in your poem... :)

This is a great read. I love the ending, especially the 'The slow cashier will eventually ring you up ' part. I can definitely see some meaning in the poem. ...

This is an amazing work. I love this poem. Rest in peace, Sable.

OK, I'll heed your advice. Thanks for reviewing, all of you!

I kinda agree with GingerLizzy...littered with cliches & that...but it's a beautiful poem, you've got some good visualization there. :)

There are a few grammar mistakes...but good work! :D