Lexi

That is brilliant!!! Can't wait for the next bit (there will be one though, right?) The line "...and what sounded like tears" is fine, but that's probably my inner poet ...

This is such a strong poem! a few tweaks would be; "You build me up To tear me down You spread your smile Like a stupid clown." I am, rather ...

As if you wrote this in ten minutes, it's awsome!! Just a few little tweaks... "Let me take your hands And free you from all demands Let me take your ...

this is and interesting poem, great theme, but you managed to write the whole thing without it sounding like something out of the bible! Skill... *Sighs, then stares out of ...

Biffle1 wrote "Feet meet feet where hearts met pavement. Tears meet cheeks where lips kissed softly. Pen meets paper where memories met freedom. Black on black where church hymns play. ...

BTW, the title is really good! but you could change it to "Battles Sealed by Walls/Doors", or "Wars Beneath the Ceiling". They're still pretty lame, sorry for ruining the flow ...

This is a seriously good poem. But i could make a few adjustments... "A flourishing art, are but the remains of labour unkind" This line sort of ruins the flow ...

Wow! that is so "out of the heart". I feel your pain coz there's a guy in my drama school who i feel the same way about but can't talk ...

that is one good peice of imagary, i like the bit when you went into the paragraph (you probably meant this but...) it gives the feeling of motion and action, ...