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Re: Greenbelt 3
Greetings I'm LastPaladin and this is very abstract and don't think I fully understand it. It's well written, and great use imagery but I'm truly nonplussed as what this is ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Wannabe Good Guy
Boy I can relate, I'm LastPaladin and I shall be your reviewer. I've read two of your poems so far and as of now this strikes me as your best, ...
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Re: Illusion
Oi vey... how can I put this... this isn't poetical, it's not even that well done, it's just a series of answers for a question that doesn't even try sound ...
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Re: A shallow puddle
At times there comes a poem that really impresses me, in your case though the idea is so simple and everyday you still managed to convey a great deal of ...
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Re: Moonlight
For this piece Scar I'm apprehensive it's a good idea don't get me wrong but some of the stuff in it reads rather awkwardly, but perhaps I should explain this ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Mask
Okay as requested here's my review, I hope you understand by now I'm harsh but it's only to improve the writing nothing else and in this case I see something ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Goodbye Mom
Sorry for delay on this, I've been meaning to do this a while, while reading it only one thing struck me and because of it this will be a short ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: The forbidden love in my fantasy
Greetings I'm LastPaladin and I shall be your reviewer, in your case I think you tried too hard and it's clearly apparent throughout. It's hard to look deeper into this ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: And Thus She Waits
Hello I'm LastPaladin and I shall be your reviewer, I felt after the second 'mellow' line I wanted to scream, not what you were looking for. This is just pure... ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: When We First Met
Hello I'm LastPaladin and in agreement with smorgishborg I have to say when doing this theme try be a little more original, but perhaps I should explain my thoughts in ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Our Time
Hello again Sol, I'm sad to break the pattern but I'm not as impressed with this piece as with your other one, it seems too slapdash, and a lot of ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Forbidden to Forsake
Greetings Solvalery I'm LastPaladin or Pal as you call me, I'm unsure of how to elaborate on my opinion of this because I don't felt completely understand, I'll give kudos ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Mannequin Love
Wickedwonder was going to review this yesterday, but got too lazy, I apologize in advance. Now I shall begin, I think I better reread this to remember my thoughts, otherwise ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Nap Interrupted
Greetings I'm LastPaladin and I felt much like Snoink this piece hits a little too close to home, the lien about jack is sweet, and when reading bean lines I ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: .
Greetings Blackbird, I have to say your poetry is a delight to read, it's grabs you in, is suitably subtle and you really get a chance to admire the terrific ...
Nov 28, 2010
