LadyOkra

Months past by Past should be "passed". There are some places you have written "with" as "WIth". Not a very jarring error. I feel that there are some sentences that ...

tell me darling, do you taste the wine from the glass you never finished? Damn, that sent a shiver down my spine. in the place where angels cry and devils ...

Perhaps, I'm wrong, but the first part of this short piece made me think of how we turn our backs to all that is wrong. We know when something is ...

I think the poem is great! I was expecting each line to be contradicted by the next. I noticed that there are some instances that do not conform to that ...

I imagine a man who's broken but isn't aware that he is broken. I like the "rawness" of this story. I would find it even more enticing if I could ...

As diffused light gradually replaces the inky darkness, a tantalizingly shimmering blue surface interspersed with white white light fluctuations creates a canopy above. I thought this sentence was a b

bout a Bertha's but and sumptuous Heather Perhaps you meant "butt" here? I thought it was quite funny. I'm in awe of your rhyming skills and I do like some ...

There are some spelling errors. "Scent" has been spelled as "sent" and there are some other errors in choosing the right article. Not very jarring and can be overlooked. I ...

The gravity of the situation could be seen in the way those accused of being esponsible were treated. "esponsible" should be "responsible". There are some missing quotation marks here and ...

I think it's a great piece. The grammar is perfect and the sentences are well constructed. There's a nice flow to the story. It is quite heartbreaking to see that ...

I really like it. There are a few mistakes here and there. "The young medic looked up at me, his hands still putting on the casualties wound" is not quite ...

I really liked it! The setting is really good. There's a good balance between things that are explained and those that are left unexplained. Some sentences here are and there ...