LadyFreeWill

Hi, this is TSM, and I'll be your reviewer today! Red font means changes, and bold face are comments. First of all, capitalize 'Thunder and Rain', you title. Thunder claps, ...

Hello, I'll be your reviewer today! First off, as I know nothig of this fiction you are fanfiction-ing for, I will stick to correcting only grammatical errors I see. The ...

Piano Man I am your piano man Here I would either put a semi-colon, or a hypen at the beginning of the next line. I sing and play , but ...

I see you staring at me Trying to figure out what's wrong I know it's always hard to see What keeps me from moving on You don't always know what ...

Has the world come down on me? As I look at the sky with seem. This line makes no sense. And now I write my words earnestly. Each time my ...

So, this is how it ends I suggest putting this thought in italics or quotation marks. , I thought feeling his hands wrap around my throat with more strength. I ...

What is it? What is it, That calls out to us? Can you here it? The quiet call, The quiet call of love. Is it a feeling? Is it a ...

Losing your virginity is supposed to be this big thing…I grew up thinking whole heartedly that I would only give mine away to someone I loved, and I thought that ...

[quote="ChimpanzeeMinkey"]I see you, standing there so quietly, like a ghost inside a dream-scape, singing lullabies of hate and misery. Untouchable, you will always be, a figment in the distance, her

quote="fireflight14"]Walking on the serene streets, I suddenly heard the screaming of the birds, The wind blowing cold, Frightened and scared stands the old. I heard a guttural boom, And a ...

Vrs1 As I’m looking down From this high set bridge There’s cars rushing by And a rugged ridge I could jump right now And end my life I could do ...

Good stuff! I like the chorus, though the first line, "How did we get this far" doesn't seem to really fit in with the rest of the chorus. I can ...

The hardest battle to win are the ones , when you feel heartless towards your family and freinds. The coldest nights are the ones , when you feel you lost ...

I break away from the monotony of apathy this moment of eradication of my feelings takes dedication; a hopeless mission to transition to a nation of empathy to dream of ...

This is very good! It's easy to understand (unlike SOME poems -ugh) and the grammar was flawless (to me, anyway). Even though I can't really relate to this poem, I'm ...