Knurla

This poem was very beautiful, dear! It seemed like the narrator has a new love in her life, but at the same time leaves you wondering. ;) My favorite part ...

Dear SuzieCake: This seems to be the start of a great story, and I can't wait to read more! As I was reading, I noticed a few things: (Kade) "I’ve ...

Hmm...I can't tell whether the "I" in this poem is in a video game or in some kind mental war with his/herself. I felt that, at first, it was a ...

With the "me" at the end of almost every line, I couldn't really focus on anything else, grammar-wise. Although, it was a very...mystical piece. I felt pity for the "me", ...

I have to disagree with Azure in one of her quotes. She hides who she truly is, letting nobody in. Instead of nobody , I think no one would sound ...

I liked the imagery you presented in this poem. It was beautiful and depressing altogether. But hope might arrive in this, unnatural place, For a bird, a sparrow is flying ...

I have to agree with Kitty, the "crystal tear" part needs to be fixed. And "strong", that was just a common mistake. Other than that, I really liked it. The ...

I really liked this. You don't see many people writing about things like this these days, and I thought the way you portrayed it was pretty good too. "Heroes in ...

I completely agree with Misty on this one. It doesn't really suck at all. We've all had this experience once or twice, or maybe even one like it. Plus, the ...