KnightlyAngel09

This has concretized the feelings that reverberate around us youngsters. :lol: I absolutely loved this. It was honest and simple and really realistic. No exagerrated feelings of tearing out hearts ...

Okay. I am not sure what this poem is about but I'll take a guess from what I understood and felt in your poem, War? While I read this I ...

Oh dear, this was beautiful. Definitely a gold star. What is knobaly? Typo? This particularly caught me. The repitition was right on amazing. They added so much to the intensity ...

The lines are too long. It gets rather tedious to read if the lines go on to eternity. Oh and too many ellipses. Anyway, those are minor things. I really ...

This is fantastic. I loved the feel of this poem. Darkness, woe and helplessness are all painted vividly. I'm not sure there is something to critic. Okay, a maybe a ...

I think that the redundancy is the style of this poem. So I didn't mind it. But, something does bother me... Way's aways away Okay, I'm not sure if it's ...

Your beginning was very plain. It was a question that just wasn't effective. It sounded like a rant but a very not-vivid rant. Sorry, that didn't make sense. It just ...

This was lovely. It was so fresh. Your descriptions were very vivid. I also didn't find any grammar mistakes. Or maybe I overlooked it. Someone filled the valley with fluffy ...

This was a great poem. I just found a few mistakes I'd like to point out first... on road to fortune. Okay, I'm not a grammar specialist but I think ...

Lovely. I loved your Breaking Dawn one and this was hillarious as well. Ima be watching out for Twilight and Eclipse. Nice to bring a luttle humor into the whole ...

I don't think the rhyme sounds forced. Well, except here: I could write a poem for you, say how my heart was torn in two. Anyway, I love this poem. ...

This was a great poem. I have only one problem with this, I think. The rhythm goes off in some parts though. The words don't flow much like here: So ...

In a silence, Okay I'm not sure, because my grammar is pretty bad but should a be the ? I liked this part. It's very symbolic. Rather like people seeing ...

This was chilling. There's a real depth to it that grips the reader. It was chilling because there was such a profound sense of helplessness, weakness and exhaustion in the ...

This was great. Your beginning catches attention at once. You used your wrods perfectly too. The way you altered nursery rhymes into cries of despair was really strong. It really ...