KitxKat

Wow, Okay. That was really sad. I absolutely have nothing to nit-pick, by the way. So, congrats and keep going ~Kit

Love it.

Firstly-if this is based on your own life, please get help. Right now. Secondly, I could only skim this because there are so many mistakes. Please message me after you ...

That was really good, and sort of bittersweet. I honestly wanted to cry when I read that, which is weird for me. Are you going to do a part from ...

That was really cute. Seriously, I don't wanna say anything mean because it's so darn cute. So, congrats, and keep writing. ~Kit

That was very beautiful. It's gives me the impression of colors swirling around, which is cool. It's a very strong poem Nice work ~Kit

That was strong and emotion-filled. It makes think, and your flow was strong. I liked it ~Kit

That was slightly blah and empty. There was no emotion, and thats what you need with a piece that short. Also, slow it down a tad. It seems sort of ...

That was interesting. There wasn't much emotion, but you're description was good. It's really good for a spur-on-the-moment-thing. Congrats ~Kit

You wrote this when you were ten? You had mad writing skills when you were ten! I love this! It is so adorable

Hey Kit, Thanks for the critique, I really appreciate it *grins*. (The use of the word sentinels makes me think of Wolverine and the X-men.) Wolverine and X-men huh? Hmmm, ...

This piece feels empty. It needs emotion. How would you feel if anyone called you those names? Keep that in mind if you expand on this. And tell me if ...

That was very strong, although short. You make up for the length by jam packing so many thoughts and emotions into those few paragraphs. Keep writing ~Kit

I like this. I could feel the emotions that you put into this poem. I find it strong , yet a little bit scred or soft. So, good job. ~Kit

I really, really like that. It's the way you put all your emotion into one poem, which I think is super sweet. I hope your girlfriend likes it too