I Must Have Missed the Important Part

by iheartbooks

Published August 30, 2010

Butter stains my pants from where I wiped my hands on them.
Mouth sticky from sugary sweets.
My eyes are glued to the screen.
Scary part, more popcorn.
Tense scene, more popcorn.
Someone dying, more popcorn.
I'm surprised I haven't gone through it all, but I always have backup.
I glance over at my Twizzlers, just to make sure they're there.
*Slurp*
Taking a drink of my slushy was a risk, but I could read lips, so I knew what they said.
No, I'm not five, much older than that.
He tries to whisper something in my ear, something sweet.
*Shh*
He looks offended, but I can't look away now.
"Babe!" he whisper-shouts, I look.
He kisses my stained red lips and tries to grab my greasy hand.
I pull away, disgusted at his ignorance.
Pointing to the screen, I say, "can't you see I'm trying to watch a movie!"
He rolls his eyes and I go back to ignoring him.
Who needs some guy when I have my movie theatre food.
At least they don't interrupt my movie.
The main character says something that I don't understand.
Oh great, just great, I must have missed the important part!



Just something silly I made up for one of my friends. You don't have to review it completely, but a simple love it/ hate it thing would be fine. Thanks
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emoinpink
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emoinpink commented Comment · Aug 31, 2010

Uhh... Liked it.

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Button wrote a review Review · Aug 31, 2010

Hi there...

Loved this... the humor and imagery in it are great, and it's really concise... really nice job with this piece, haha. Awesome voice too. As Crimsona pointed out, there is the double "lips", but that's the only thing worth changing. Awesome write.

-Coral-

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Crimsona wrote a review Review · Aug 30, 2010

I love this, it's great! It's short, sweet, doesn't drag on, and pure greatness (if that's a word).

The only thing I spotted was

He kisses my stained red lips lips and tries to grab my greasy hand.

Just a double word.

I really like this poem,

Keep writing,

~Crimson

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KitxKat
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KitxKat commented Comment · Aug 30, 2010

Love it.

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KAH
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KAH commented Comment · Aug 30, 2010

I love this!



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