Kaylyn

Um EWW did you get the part were they were killing the sow. THAT WAS DISTUBING IF YOU GET WHAT IT MEANT. They raped the sow before they killed it. ...

NOOOOOO, Butler and Holly dies, oh okay, Holly doesn't die. *lets out a sigh of relief* I haven't gotten the latest book yet. and read it. I want to but ...

When you post alot, it is harder for everyone to critique. If you break it down into sections readers are more likely to read and review and catch more mistakes. ...

Hey, I think its looking good. I didn't find any grammar mistakes that jumped out at me, some of your sentances might need to be rephased but thats to make ...

I love what you've got so far, it a really good story. Very detailed and it grabs the readers attention. Normally i would give you a paragrapg by paragraph critique ...

Okay you took this way to fast, I could hardly keep up with parts. Please put a space after each period. It really bothers my eyes!!! Also you had a ...

I like what you have so far, make sure you put your flashbacks in italics. Makes it easier for the reader to comprehend. It has a lot of potential, and ...

I love what you have so far. Was that it, or is there more to it? Your book definately has potential. Along the way though I only found one grammar ...

He works at the station... what station? *feels growing dread* Hopefully its not a police station. I know it tempting but don't make it like twilight! I beg you. Okay ...

There was no sun just clouds. The temperature dropping rapidly. It was just how I expected Cold Bay, Alaska. That just had to be the place my dad lived, Eric ...

Okay I don't really understand this story. But maybe thats just me... I don't watch dragonball Z. I watched one episode. This isn't your best poece of work. I think ...

I really like this story.PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE,CONTINUE IT. I hate cliffhangers they're so cruel. Now for the critique. ----------------------------------------------------------------- The urge came b

I really like your book its very original, and very interesting. But there are a few mistakes so I'll do a line by line critique. Rhys pounded down the wharf, ...

*breaks into applause* Very original I really liked it. You did have a typo along the way: “Don’t forget to see your father,” Sethmumbled after me. “He said he had ...

Okay I like the story...but its a bit too fast. I think it needs more description too. You make the battle seem like its no big deal. Put some more ...