Karzkin
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*Is summoned* I read this, and thought of doing a close reading, but I think the problems that exist here require a more meta approach. The improvement is needed in ...
Jan 2, 2016
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Hey. Not sure if we've met before, it's been a while since I've been around. I have to say, you've come a fair way since I first saw your stuff ...
Jan 1, 2016
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Hey Hugo. Welcome to YWS. I dig what you're going for here. Peaceful and friendly during the day, like a family beach holiday. Chaotic and dangerous at night, like a ...
Jan 3, 2015
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I have no idea how you could possibly classify this as poetry. The only thread connecting it to any form of poetry is the 5/7/5 syllable pattern of a Western ...
Jan 27, 2014
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Hey, sorry it's been so long, I totally forgot that you asked me to do this. Ok, so it's alright, I see where you're going with this. You have some ...
Jan 19, 2014
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Ok so I lied, it's been like three days since I said I'd look at this. But I made it eventually. You know prose isn't my strong suit, but here ...
Jan 1, 2014
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Hey Nargles. Quick word on the formatting; try pressing shift+enter for line breaks, and enter for stanza breaks. Ok, so poem. I see where you're going here, but you can ...
Dec 29, 2013
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Hi. Welcome to the party. Ok, so I almost didn't read this because of its length. Not that a really long poem is bad (in fact many of my favourite ...
Dec 26, 2013
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I'm not really sure why this is filed under 'poetry'. It's lacking pretty much everything that a piece of writing requires to be categorised as poetry. Actually, I'm not sure ...
Nov 28, 2013
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Hey there. Ok, so prose poetry. Why prose poetry? Not that there is anything wrong with prose poetry, but why not normal free verse? Now the actual poem. You know, ...
Nov 27, 2013
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Hey capt. K here. I'm proud of you for writing about this sort of thing. I know it takes some guts. Good to hear you're doing alright now. Let's talk ...
Nov 24, 2013
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Hey. K here. Ok I'm not really feeling this. It's just... senseless really. I mean, there are threads of ideas, but nothing that can really be considered a theme. This ...
Nov 23, 2013
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Hi DreamWork, To be honest I'm not all that thrilled by this. The topic is pretty good, as topics go, but you miss the mark I think. There's a lot ...
Nov 17, 2013
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Hey. Sorry it took me so long to do this one. Ok, so I'm not digging it much. With the exception of a very small number of masters of the ...
Sep 1, 2013
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Hey Twit, sorry this one took me so long. I dig the sentiment, simple though it may be (there is, of course, nothing wrong with simplicity). What I don't like ...
Sep 1, 2013