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This flowed very smoothly. The thing is, it flowed a bit too smoothly, which resulted in me reading this all the way through thrice without actually registering the content. Quite ...

Being an adult, I trust you can handle criticism maturely. As such, I shan't be holding back. There was a niggling little presentiment in the back of my mind as ...

Bluntness beyond. Beware. And when those diamond tears would fall, Involuntary visceral reaction = eurgh. I was following well enough up until this point. "Diamond tears" and all its variants ...

Alrighty then. First things first: as popatemyheart1994 already pointed out, you have a lot of spelling mistakes. Coupled with the spacing (which I will cover in a bit more depth ...

And incandescent, Luminescent, Did you mean "incandescent luminescence" or "incandescence, luminescence"? Of the threnody Tied tight around my heart. "Of the funeral song tied tight around my heart."

Waiting to envelop me once more. "Envelope" with the "e" is the thing you put letters into. Meanwhile, lonely "envelop" without the "e" is always looking for someone/something to enclose ...

Harshness ahead. You have been warned. So. You have a rhyming poem here, but the first line does not rhyme with anything. Care to explain why? And then you have ...

Jerome and I were walking hand -in- hand This is a mistake you have recurring throughout the poem, and it really distracted me. I highly suggest you fix it. The ...

Hello, dasiamari. I'll be reviewing you today on this lovely Review Day. This poem was very short. Now, normally I really like short poems (because they're so short), but this ...

Hello there, Crystalkitten, and welcome to YWS. You might want to get around to reviewing other members' stories and/or poems. It will get you the points you need to post ...

Patience, O Flowery One. Review Day comes once a month to rescue all from being review-less. :P have a moment to look at another "The" just sounds wrong and makes ...

That place I desire is where my every storm was calmed by the music of her words. Watch your subject-verb agreement. Speaking of verbs, you switch tenses constantly throughout this ...

On my own, against them Now you're gone, you’re a tart Watch your spelling. Overall, the only consistent thing about this song was the chorus. The rhythm of the verses ...

Hello there, ZoeRenee, and welcome to YWS. I see you've already gotten busy with the reviewing, and that's great. :D Now, onto the review. Your lines struck me as very ...

Smeared me with ash and soot, Blackened by your flight. Touched the heart of my trunk, My leaves, my fragile roots, Deep in the dark earth You lit on fire, ...