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Hello there kerokaeru! I, Murtle, usually known as Kyllorac, will be reviewing you today, on this very fine Review Day. With that said, onto the review! The first thing I ...

This poem was very, very, very, very, very, very, very, (you get the idea) very repetitious. And because it was so very, very repetitious, it was also very, very, very, ...

This poem was really simple, which really made it hit all the harder, emotionally-speaking. Honestly, I really don't have much to say. This poem was sad, it made me feel ...

I wish I could be an eagle, soaring high, above the clouads, above the sky, Ouch. The rather common-yet-misspelled word right there in the first line makes me as a ...

So, the first stanza is chock full of adjectives, and yet, when I think about it, all those adjectives are rather common and bland, and so they do not actually ...

Once upon a dusty smokey ruin, upon the dirt and grass the bodies lay the dead and dying of the blue and the gray This first stanza is actually pretty ...

Hello again ! Wow. This makes three poems of yours that I've reviewed tonight. It's kinda sad, really, considering this means no one else wanted to review your poems. But ...

Fades quickly away like water to pen. ...what? That simile doesn't even make sense . How does water fade away to pen? It boggles the mind and makes the again/pen ...

Oh. Hello again. I just finished reviewing another one of your poems. What a coincidence. Sick with diversity. I think this line would be more powerful (and far more effective) ...

Even if we share all in common, This line is rather awkwardly phrased. Using "everything" rather than "all" sounds more natural and makes more sense. At least... not in the ...

Falling, I had this illusion, I was falling, into nothingess. So, while falling, you're experiencing the illusion of falling? That doesn't make sense. Also, "nothingness" is misspelled. Considering th

Hello there, this fine Review Day! I'm busy tackling various works without any reviews, and so there's a disproportionate amount of unreviewed later chapters of novels floating around, which is ...

Maybe I'm just waiting [b]for[/for] a time that I will be prepared to take on whatever facts I unravel. A little mistake, perhaps, but in a piece as short as ...

Someone has been reading The Hunger Games, I see. While there's nothing wrong with emulating the writing of those you admire (it's an important way to learn how to write), ...

With how sparse this is, there isn't much to comment on. I am curious why you chose a more script-like format for the prologue. It has me wondering if the ...