Kale

This was very short, and because of how short it was, I'm not sure what to make of it. Also, since this is just an excerpt, it's difficult to critique ...

Hey there! Here to return the review favor. ;P A yellow flower, A rising sun, Morning breaking -- Summer ’s begun. The m-dash makes a bit more sense grammatically than ...

This is an issue that doesn't affect only fanfiction, but all other types of fiction as well. That said, not everyone is into the action side of things; some people ...

Not a bad beginning. :D Still, as with all first steps, there's improvements to be made. While it is impressive that you kept up with the rhyme, in places, it ...

I think most of the haiku could benefit from some more punctuation. The second haiku didn't flow as well as I think it could. I'd suggest revising the last two ...

First things first: is there, or is there not, a rhyme scheme? You start out sort of having one, then you have a rhyming couplet followed immediately after by a ...

No apologetic glances. No time spent on unwarranted tears. Watch your spelling. I am wondering why there are periods at the end of every line. Grammatically it makes no sense. ...

Welcome to the site! I hope you have a long and fruitful stay. :D That said, I am going to be brutally honest with you. Please don't take it personally. ...

The repetition in this is lovely, and the rhyme doesn't sound forced at all. From the first line, it had me hooked, and flowed wonderfully, for the most part. Also, ...

This was just lovely, and there is nothing I can really see to crit, which is really great. :D I'm curious, though, why you used contractions for "see it," "in ...

Very short, but I can really relate to this. I really hate saying goodbye. However, I'm wondering why you have every line ending in a comma. Poems, for the most ...

As already mentioned, the first stanza gives a very different impression than the rest of the poem. That's easily fixed, though; just mention that the narrator is also taking part ...

I liked the repetition of the first stanza at the end; it was a very nice touch. That said, though, the body of the poem lacked any unique or strong ...

Honestly, I have no clue what you were trying to say with this poem. What is like running through an archway? How does it relate to being a wandering soul? ...

This story struck me as a bit simplistic, to be frank. It's a good base, but I think it would benefit quite a lot from a bit more fleshing out. ...