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Kalder

Kalder

  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: In the Morning

    I have read dark poem before and I can honestly say this is one the best I have ever read. The second and third stanza is amazing because it raises ...

    Jan 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Gravity

    This poem actually put a tear in my eye. So many details yet so many questions arouse within me. For starters what caused her to consider committing suicide it arouses ...

    Jan 9, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Action / Adventure Re: Bluesey's Congressman(Con)

    I think this was a great start to what I hope will be a full novel. I had some questions as to why parents would let their son go biking ...

    Jan 9, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Fatewriter - Prologue

    I realize the this is a prologue but I still have so many questions about this old man. That's not me criticizing I think it's important to leave the reader ...

    Jan 9, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Troublemaker

    I liked the details you put into describing his physical state. The girl he killed who is she? How did he kill her? It leaves me with a lot of ...

    Jan 9, 2014
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Realistic Re: Countdown

    I liked the villain you made out of the man with the twisted face it reminds me a bit of Sylar from Heroes. The way he talked and acted seemed ...

    Jan 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Glass girl

    I really enjoyed reading the description of the girl. It reminds me of the writing style of The house on Mango Street. I would have liked to hear more about ...

    Jan 9, 2014


Besides, if you want perfection, write a haiku. Anything longer is bound to have some passages that don't work as well as they might.
— Philip Pullman