Justlittleoleme2

This is a nice rough draft of what could be a pretty cool story, but right now it's just a framework. You make straight forward statements like, the house was ...

Hello! It's justlittleoleme here to review your chapter. I'm not great at grammar, so I can't offer much in that category, but I can offer some advice in the style ...

This poem is so perfect. I think anyone who has ever been through love, over love, and back to love again can relate. We all tell ourselves we have grown, ...

Is this from personal experience from feelings you have really felt, or is this how you imagine wanting to to escape emotional hell feels like? If these are you own ...

Beautiful. Well written. You set the stage, and introduced the characters with graceful efficiency. I love the way the counting connects the end to the beginning and your use of ...

This is a poem by Robert Frost. It's been changed a little here and there, but barely. If you want to share poetry by authors you love, and find other ...

Some would argue that this isn't a poem, but I disagree. I mean, it's very free form, and mostly flow of thought, but it's self expression in stanzaic structure, and ...

Hey there. It's just little ole me here to review. I'll start by saying that I appreciate the that you are tackling such a difficult subject, and I like your ...

I've fallen in love with the imagery of this piece. At first, I couldn't find anything to critique, but after reading it a few more times I realized that if ...

Your use of language is dynamic. Deep, damp darkness. Proud bold anxious men. Loud laughter. It's really fun to read, and easy to visualize. But some of the lines broke ...

Another exceptional work for you Yoyou! Your use of language is powerful and poetic. Simply lovely. ^-^ Sadly... or happily, I don't have much critique to offer. (Few trees stood, ...

First things first. This was a very enjoyable read. It carried my interest all the way through, and I found myself very emotional involved with the story. That being said ...

Your use of language is beautiful! It has a sort of rhythm that pulls you in and immerses you. I feel as though I can see Battleboro Vermont and its ...

Hey there! First off, I love your wry sense of humor. Illness is tough, it takes a bit of spunk to carry you through. ;) Now, on to the review. ...

I like this poem very much. It points out the true nature of humanity. Not that they are cruel, but merely caught up in their own little world, with their ...