Justagirl

Very interesting poem. I love the emotion in it and the flow is also pretty good. The one thing you need to add is less commas and more periods. Just ...

This is really good! I think you're getting better... ;) Just a couple of things.... a virgin pure as salt of the sea! You really don't need a exclamation mark ...

Aaaawesome! This emotion is really great and this poem is so clear . The only thing wrong with it is it's flow, which stops being weird at this stanza on: ...

Great poem. I can feel the emotion and it all flows pretty well ;) The only thing is... Look , I did it M a That's the only problem that ...

Loved this. It's got great flow and the emotion is pretty good. The only line that interrupts the flow is: Who am I kidding It doesn't seem to go with ...

This is really good. Although I'm not religious I could feel great emotion in this and your imagery was really great. But, if it's a song (like you said it ...

I loved this. It made me smile and I felt it and it was awesome. My only nitpick is.... Every fear you have will be disproven - if that's the ...

This is awesome. You have such great imagery in here I can totally imagine being right there and watching everything you describe. Plus you have really great emotion and flow. ...

This is really great. Although you weren't aiming for understanding also I understood it perfectly. And it was wonderful. Your emotion and imagery was really great and if all your ...

Uh, wow. This poem is really good. You have so much emotion packed in it it's like it's vibrating :) The only thing it kind of lacks is flow. If ...

This is really odd. And funny/cool. :) Here are the things that are kind of odd: A cat ate a purple lily (You probably could just say, 'A cat ate ...

This is really great. I like a lot of your poems but this one isn't the same as the rest. It doesn't flow quite so well because there are only ...

This is an interesting poem. I don't really understand what it's supposed to be about and you definitely need more punctuation and some help with your flow. Other than that ...

This is very interesting... You definitely need to add some more punctuation and capitalization. Also, what are those words in parentheses for? What are they all about? They made almost ...

In the letter to 'Bald Asshole': That was pretty rude of us, and for it you r probably worried for the future generations. In the non-letter paragraphs: No one was ...