This poem is inspired by a girl I knew who ran away form home, I don't know if she did it for the right reasons or not. This is just my interpretation of it. Hope you guys enjoy it...
I walked out of the door
To never come back again.
I turned around one last time
To never look back again.
I felt piercing eyes on my back,
For he must be staring
At my retreating figure;
Walking away from him
And his gift of a miserable filthy life.
I felt my breathing
Grow fast and faster,
As my feet moved unceremoniously,,
Taking me away from the prison in disguise.
I broke into a run,
As soon as I sensed he would follow,
Try to make me stop
And listen to his sorrow.
I died a slow death,
Every night he came in;
Touch me with his ice cold fingers,
Those made me shiver all night.
I cried all night;
After he would leave me,
Drowning in the ocean
Of my own benign misery.
I woke up every morning,
Trying to look normal and happy,
But you would see my red, swollen eyes
And know exactly what I went through.
Look I did it Ma
I did, what you wanted me to do,
I finally found the guts to free myself
From the clutches of an evil monster.
Being scared from him,
Made me realize-
I had to get away
Or I would be stuck here for life.
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Great poem. I can feel the emotion and it all flows pretty well
The only thing is...
That's the only problem that I saw!
Great job with it. You've earned a Like from me
Keep writing,
Alzora
i read your poem and thought it was pretty good. i also hope you gat a chance to read my poem when i submit it.
i read your poem and thought it was pretty good. i also hope you gat a chance to read my poem when i submit it.
Well, it's her father and glad you liked it....
The girl left her home right? but from who? sorry but I cant figure it out.

I liked this poem, I am just confused "who is she running away from?"
I will not review you on grammar cause even my grammar is POOR. hehe...
But I like the meaning of it, whether she runs from her father of her husband hehe