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  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Old Man

    Hey there Joshua :), I generally don't do nitpicks, but there are a few places I'd like to 'pick' at here. Overall, I think the story is impressive. As I ...

    Oct 8, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Cara's Funeral

    Irishfire! Hello! You have a cool username, haha. I'm June, your reviewer for the moment. Skillet, huh? Not every day I find a fan of them! (I'm a closet fan, ...

    Oct 7, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: FACEMAP. Chapter 3. [R-13 for Swear Words]

    Hello Auteur :). I'm June, and I'll be your reviewer for the moment. I think that this story has a ground for potential. I have followed this since you posted ...

    Oct 7, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Lonely Creature Behind the Glass

    Aloha, Kammie! Can't quite grasp this one. It's a decent poem, I think, but it seems more like a start to me. I think you should work on revising this. ...

    Oct 6, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Helix is a Highway

    Impressive, Galeri! I agree with Daisy; it was very intense, as well as very well-versed with a steady pull. Your beginning was addictive, and you carried the quality through to ...

    Sep 30, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Solace is misfortune, Chap.1/part.1:

    Greetings, Henry, and a warm welcome to YWS! Nice! I love your direction; action, mystery, all of that great stuff here. I'm definitely going to follow this one along as ...

    Sep 22, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: a rose for the abused..

    Wow, Eddie! This is good; I can honestly say that you've come a long way. Your poetry is steadily improving (and even if you don't think so, I promise, it ...

    Sep 14, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: covent garden

    Kylan, [Before I proceed to drone on about the awesomosity of this, let me warn you and say that I am overly rusty at reviewing and don't think I'll say ...

    Sep 14, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Wild Roses

    G'day Rosey, I'm a bit overly rusty at reviewing, so if I'm unclear in anything, feel free to send me a PM or post in my guestbook, and I'll do ...

    Sep 13, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Ambivalence

    Hi, Ambrosia It's an okay start. I'd love to see you build onto this, make it fuller, more substantial. For now, it's kind of empty, kind of like a soliloquy. ...

    Aug 16, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: I'm You. [Prologue]

    Hey Jaderemoi! June here! In all honesty, I didn't find this prologue interesting. I didn't think it had any bit of a "hook" to it, and in a strange way, ...

    Aug 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Trust.

    Hey Creative! Decent start. As some of the other reviewers mentioned, I think this could use a good deal of building on. Right now, you're giving us a few pieces ...

    Aug 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I Don't Love Your Dad Anymore.

    Hello, sheep! I think this poem has some potential, but could use a bit of work. To start, the organization stood out to me; the thoughts in this seemed scattered, ...

    Aug 16, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Halfbreed Chapter One

    Heylo, Tiff! June here! Two excuses: I haven't reviewed much standardized prose lately, I've dealt more in informative articles, minimalist, and experimental type writing lately, that I think I may ...

    Aug 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Yellow

    Kylankylankylan!!! Breathtakingly well done! I can't say that this is awesome in the same way that apostasy and hospice are, but, this is definitely beyond fantastic. Not to say that ...

    Aug 16, 2009


It suddenly struck me that that tiny pea, pretty and blue, was the Earth. I put up my thumb and shut one eye, and my thumb blotted out the planet Earth. I didn't feel like a giant. I felt very, very small.
— Neil Armstrong