Juniper

Hey! June bug here. The Sergeant gripped his rifle in a death grip. The repetition of grip bores me; "death grip" is sadly too flat a description, and I would ...

This is cute! And bittersweet in some ways. I really enjoyed the images you gave us, dear, but I felt that, in more places than one, you could connect the ...

Hi, Matt! The first thing that came to mind when I read this was a vampire. . . Anyway, I do think this poem is good. You have a good ...

Hey there! I have to say I don't like this as much as I should. I think that the images you're using of school are far too common, overused cliches ...

Hey, Kammieyaz! I'm going to agree with Kylan on the boardwalk that says that this is too still-life. It's like, almost as if you've paused a scene in Haiti and ...

Hello, there! This is interesting. :) I think that you begin on solid legs, and keep it up idealistically for the most part. I'd enjoy seeing a little bit of ...

Hey, Tim! This is interesting! I'm not so sure of the last stanza, because using "I want" is kind of hinting that you're lamenting your own life, and while the ...

Hello, there! In your title you have "Im finally me"; I just want to point out that you're using the contracted form of I am, so it should be I'm. ...

Heylo! I love short poems. They're much easier to enjoy than some long ones, because they don't drone on for ages. I'm not so sure how much I like this ...

Hello! Interesting poem here! I think it's pretty neat how some of the lines serve as beginnings for one thought and the start of another. In some spots, that did ...

Hello, there! This is cute! I like this poem for the most part, but the third line, "Started with the garden plow" seems a little bit like it doesn't fit. ...

Hello, Jon! The sky was • with rain that day You seem like you're missing an adjective, dear. Heavy, laden, blue, -- anything. It feels like there's a hole you ...

Hello, Lydia! Ooh, car crash! Exciting! I think the idea behind this poem is all good, cool stuff, but I think you do need to work on your execution of ...

Kyllorac! I had no idea you even wrote poetry. You seem like a novelist to me, haha. I like the rhythm and rhyme scheme of this poem. It's effortless, and ...

Hullo, Telle! I like this song! I'd like to know how it's intended to be sang/what music it's intended to be set to. Some of the lines carried on longer ...