Juniper

Legend, To separate this from the multiples of blaming poems that circulate involving heartache, you need to add more to this. I would recommend adding some concrete imagery to describe ...

Hello Elinor! (Allow me to reiterate that I am overly critical nowadays. It may stem from the fact that college is getting to me in more ways than one) I ...

Hey, Soleil, I enjoy short poetry because it's usually a brilliant display of effort -- it takes a lot to fit a wonderful poem into such few words, and I ...

Hey there! June here! I admit that the color was a bit of a distraction, haha, and even though that's got nothing to do with the words, I recommend refraining ...

Hey there, Howler! This is quite an interesting piece. I like it, for the tone of it is quite hallmark-ish, although the words of it are not as sweet as ...

flootsie! June here! :) A tear gently fell down my cheek as I realized it was over. Does this happen simultaneously, or should it be "When I realized it was ...

Hey, Eric! I like this! I feel that there were a few things in it that could be improved, such as, as a few mentioned, the cohesion of this, but ...

Hey there! To be blatantly honest, I generally don't like poems that rhyme and carry romantic themes because they come off as overdone or cliche. Here, I don't think you ...

Hello, there! Welcome to the magical lands of YWS (we're all out of unicorns, though). Seems as if you've already got a bit of criticism here. I'll keep mine brief, ...

Hey, Ahmed, Rhyme's not my strongest avenue in poetry, so I must admit that my judgement of this is partially clouded by the fact that it's hard for me to ...

Hello there! June here. :) Interesting method to begin a story in the middle of pending action! I quite like that approach, although it could be better executed if you ...

Hello, there! I have to admit, I'm confused! I don't know what happened, haha, in the first part, they had seemingly already departed, and here, they seem like they've gone ...

Hey there! Nice job done here. :) You have a nice writing style. I don't like the opening line, dear. I could just be being picky or whatever, but in ...

Hello! In honesty, I don't have much to say on this, because it's one of those stories that make me smile when I read it, because it's just guiltless humor. ...

Hey, there! Juneth here. :) So! This is a start! And, it's better than some starts that I've read this morning, but the only thing holding me back from saying ...