JohnLocke1

Although this is a very descriptive and beautiful piece, I felt as though nothing really happened. Besides the last three paragraphs, everything else felt like it was simply filling space. ...

I am always interested to see how different writers handle the subject of death. I often have my characters stunned into disbelief as well because that is how I often ...

I never read books in the present tense. I don't know why, but I have never found them entertaining what so ever. However, your story genuinely made me interested. The ...

This premise is somewhat bland. You need to give the reader a reason to continue reading. Right now, her fiance died and she was left alone. Although that could become ...

I couldn't tell what it was, but something about the beginning of this story simply made me smile. As I was reading your dialogue, thought, I thought it was a ...

Interesting short story. There were a few grammatical errors, problems with punctuation, and awkward phrasing, but I don't often focus on grammar in my reviews unless I am specifically asked ...

This could turn into a very promising story. I suggest your pursue it! However, I would explain a few things. Why is this world hidden and when did it begin ...

This was a really fantastic short story! Even though it wasn't long, it had a very advanced literary arc. The build up in the beginning was clear and you had ...

This is a very powerful poem you've written. I usually do not enjoy poems that rhythm, but this one actually entertained me. I can't really review poems since they aren't ...

Wow. This is a very interesting concept you've written about here. I don't think I've ever read anything written from the point of view of a cereal box. I think ...

I feel like this plot line is very overdone. Guy of her dreams. She thinks she isn't worth it. He thinks she's great. They fall in love. It's very monotonous. ...

Very good writing on your part. It was descriptive and it had a clear voice. However, I was a bit confused as to what the purpose of this piece of ...

That was quite the story. Your beginning paragraph really showed me everything that it needed to and I was genuinely drawn in. I had no idea it was a video ...

I see what you mean by Rain's POV having meaning. It certainly does. But, I feel as though the plot line moves very fast. I read a lot of Fantasy ...

This was a very interesting concept made better by your very talented writing. Your description writing was quite amazing. I would clear everything up, though. You put a lot of ...