JessicaB

As promised, I went through this chapter as well. I didn't look at the other reviews, so sorry for any repeats, but I think you would have edited it, so ...

Okay you let me know you had a cool story you were working on, so I had to check it out. I found some errors. I didnt look through the ...

I need this reviewed because it is a contest entry at my school and i dont trust my teacher :D Anne lifted the last box marked dishes/ utensils out from ...

Prologue: I seesawed through unconsciousness. My dreams were only the sharp daggers of pain and the erratic breathing coming through my lungs. The darkness in my head enveloped me again, ...

Okay, I've read through this, and there are a couple mistakes I will point out but the big thing I notice is, it seems you are rushing through the story. ...

Chapter Two “We don’t know till I complete the Change.” I said, grabbing a pillow from bed. I dont mean to be a pest, LOL, but the chapter doesn't really ...

The writing is good, but you need more detail or the readers are going to get lost while reading. I noticed something big, you put in parenthesizes (I say screeched ...

Creative...yeah, but in my opinion you kind twisted the characters in a way that they just shouldn't be twisted. I am a fan of the Twilight series but this just ...

Wow. I really liked that! That is wicket cool. I loved twilight but I just feel like the books are too freaking popular now. It sucks. If you liked her ...

Demon Hunter The Beginning Prologue A young woman walked down the dark empty hallway. The wooden floor creaked under her as she took another step down. She stopped walking for ...

Hi! I think most of the errors are with Capitalization and Punctuation. Read through it carefully and correct those simple things. And more advice would be to go through the ...

Hello, I like it a lot. The beginning plot seems to be great. I know I want to hear more! I want to know what is going to happen next. ...